Writing with clarity
Poor: The cup fell off the desk full of water.
Better: The cup full of water fell off the desk.
Poor: The girl got a bad grade on her test due to the fact that she didn’t study.
Better: The girl got a bad grade on her test because she didn’t study.
Poor: Kevin Durant now plays for the Golden State Warriors. He used to play for the Oklahoma City Thunder.
Better: Kevin Durant, former Oklahoma City Thunder player, now plays for the Golden State Warriors.
Poor: President Boren said due to severe weather all classes will be cancelled tomorrow.
Better: All classes tomorrow have been cancelled due to severe weather, President Boren said.