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Writing with clarity 

Poor: The cup fell off the desk full of water.

Better: The cup full of water fell off the desk.

Reducing clutter

Poor: The girl got a bad grade on her test due to the fact that she didn’t study.

Better: The girl got a bad grade on her test because she didn’t study.

Sentence variety

Poor: Kevin Durant now  plays for the Golden State Warriors. He used to play for the Oklahoma City Thunder.

Better: Kevin Durant, former Oklahoma City Thunder player, now plays for the Golden State Warriors.

Sentence emphasis

Poor: President Boren said due to severe weather all classes will be cancelled tomorrow.

Better: All classes tomorrow have been cancelled due to severe weather, President Boren said.

Writing Effectively