Writing with clarity:
Poor Example: We looked for the tools on the floor in the shop and we couldn’t find them.
Better Example: We looked for the tools on the shop floor and could not find them.
Reducing Clutter
Poor Example: Due to the fact that I have a test tomorrow, I will make sure that I study and I will also make sure that I complete all of my homework assignments tonight.
Better Example: Because I have a test tomorrow, I will study and complete my homework assignments tonight.
Sentence Variety
Poor Example: My mother is a teacher at an elementary school. Last year, she won the teacher of the year award. We were very proud.
Better Example: We were very proud of my mother, an elementary school teacher, for winning the teacher of the year award last year.
Sentence Emphasis:
Poor Example: The police officer said that the car crash was very serious and the driver is lucky to be alive
Better Example: The driver is lucky to be alive after a very serious car crash, the police officer said.