- Writing with Clarity
- Better: Hang the Westbrook jersey in the close.
- Poor: Hang the jersey in the closet with Westbrook on the back.
- Reducing Clutter
- Poor: The dancer bought not one but two pairs of pointe shoes.
- Better: The dancer bought both pairs of pointe shoes.
- Sentence Variety
- Poor: The Firebird is premiering on November 4th. The ballet is about a magical red bird that defeats an evil magician.
- Better: The Firebird, a ballet about a magical red bird who defeats an evil magician, is premiering on November 4th.
- Sentence Emphasis
- Poor: The Norman Police department sent out flyers to norman residents regarding traffic routes on game days.
- Better: Norman residents received flyers regarding traffic routes on game days from the Norman Police department.
